Title?
Page numbers? There are some important issues as regards format that you have to pay attention to.
Your critique is quite effective but there are things to polish.
Most books allow the reader different ways [YAC1] of reading them and Women’s body, women’s wisdom is not the exception. Dr. Northrup (1999) wrote what can be read[YAC2] as a complete guide to physical and emotional health or as an autobiographical account which leads the reader to deep reflexion on lifestyles, health, cultural inheritance, holistic medicine, alternative therapies, femininity and other relevant topics in a woman’s life. This nine hundred and forty two-pages-long book is an invaluable source of testimonies and scientific data which make of it an easy reading book aimed at women[YAC3] .
Paradoxical though it may seem, this highly scientific text is [YAC4] easily accessible to a standard reader. This complex-to achieve quality of the text has been achieved due to the fact that the author combines scientific explanations and academic jargon from medicine together with personal anecdotes, illustrations, stories and other resources which reduce the otherwise inaccessible information. The simplicity of her writing style remains from the first to the last page and this makes from the reading a pleasurable experience.
Such a pleasure is reinforced by the content of the book. Patriarchal myth, addictive system, feminine intelligence, inner guide, feminine energetic system, the anatomy of women’s wisdom, steps to heal and the power of movement are some of the topics which Dr. Northrup (1999) develops in a complete and complex, though not difficult fashion. Through these themes she makes explicit the idea that the well-being of women cannot be disassociated from their everyday lives and the role they fulfil in society. By providing endless anecdotes from her professional experience or from colleagues, the author proves that when women with any health problem change some basic harmful living conditions, those problems can be generally overcome in a more complete way with less medical interventions.
This book also offers complete and detailed information about the rich and most frequently disregarded women’s wisdom:; It combines the last scientific techniques in medicine with alternative therapies which benefit not only the body but also the mind of women. From a holistic perspective which takes into consideration personal development, emotions and spiritual life, the writer unmasks the patriarchal stance in the medical profession and she also reveals the dark sides of many culturally inherited misbelieves.
The sincerity of the experiences narrated, together with the acute and brave reflexions by Northrup (1999) shed some light on the deepest needs, strongest qualities and the most intimate conflicts of women, in which ambivalence of feelings, maternal instinct and the creative impulse make of them a complete, complex and at the same time delicate gender.
After reading Women’s body, women’s wisdom[YAC5] , one can finally conclude understanding and feeling, as Northrup (1999) stated, that:
There are people who recognise the daily existence of mystery, uncertainty and hope in life.
There are people who crave welfare and they know that heal goes beyond pills and medical techniques.
There are people who accept how much we ignore.
There are people who know that our heal will not be complete as far as we do not regain the sacred aspect of our daily lives.
There are people who already dare look after sincere faith, hope and joy in spite of the depressing effects of conventional thinking.
( Northrup, 1999, p. 7)
In case you are, or want to be this kind of women you cannot miss the chance to read this book[YAC7] .
Northrup, C. (1999). Women’s body, women’s wisdom. New York , NY
Paper: Review/Critique | |||||
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LAYOUT | 1 | 2 | 3 | 4 | (5 to 20) |
Format | No headers, no page numbers, no clear margins. Spacing problems. Inappropriate font. | No Header included. Page numbers absence. Spacing problems. | Header and page numbers included. Spacing problems. Inappropriate font. | Clear paper’s presentation. There are page numbers. Respected margins. Correct spacing and type & size of font. 1.5 or double interlining. | 2 |
Header | Not included. | Included. Too much information. | Included. Not well balanced. | Included. Precise info is given. Well balanced. | 2 |
Title | Not included. | Included. Not suitable. Underlined, highlighted or italicized. | Included. Appealing. Underlined, highlighted or italicized. | Included. Appealing. Centered. | 1 |
References | Not mentioned. Plagiarism. | Mentioned vaguely. Not on a new sheet of paper. Not clear use of references or erroneous sources acknowledgement | Not clear use of references or erroneous sources acknowledgement. | Sources cited clearly in a reference list at the end of the paper. APA style. | 3 |
In-text citations | Not included. Plagiarism. | Little use of in-text citations. Incorrect use of required style. | Included. Not well balanced. Repeated pattern. (e.g. too many quotes, only paraphrasing, etc). | Included. Well balanced. Different techniques applied. It is read smoothly. APA. | 2 |
CONTENT | 1 | 2 | 3 | 4 | (10 to 40) |
Data analysis | Not clear analysis. Relationships & comparisons cannot be followed. | Brief. Not substantial. Some connections can be followed. | Clear. Good analysis. No evidence presented. Inversion. Hedging. Conditionals. | Very good. Clear analysis. Comparisons can be established. Evidence is provided. Inversion. Hedging & conditionals. | 2 |
Terminology/ Word choice | Difficult to follow. Not understandable. Imprecise language. No acronyms clarification. | Inappropriate terminology. Little clarification. Some terms are not academic. | Legible terminology. Clarification. More academic style. Effective. | Legible terminology. New terms clarification. Effective vocabulary. Good use of connectors. Academic style. | 2 |
Spelling | Full of errors. Unreadable. | Many errors. Some parts unreadable. | Few errors. Readable. | All words are spelled correctly. | 4 |
Sentence variety | Many sentence fragments. Same pattern and length. | Some sentence fragments. Same pattern & length. | Most sentences are complete and varied in pattern & length. | Complete sentences in a variety of patterns and lengths. | 2 |
Organization | Vague ideas. Long & confusing intro. Unrelated development. Blurred conclusion. | Some ideas connected to each other. Purpose established. No transitions. Main point presented. Two of the three parts are not clear or too long. | Connected ideas. Clear purpose. Marked transitions. One of the three parts is not clear or too long. | Connected ideas: supporting the main topic. Clear and concise introduction. Clear development: good clarification of major points. Clear conclusion. | 3 |
Punctuation | Frequent and major errors that obscure meaning. | Some frequent or major errors: Readers’ confusion. | A few errors. | No punctuation errors. | 3 |
Paragraph content & paragraph length | Not balanced: too long & too short paragraphs are presented. | Some paragraphs relate to the topic. Not balanced: too long or too short paragraphs are presented. | Most paragraphs are related to the topic. Well balanced. | Paragraph length has been respected & achieved. Smooth. Clear and precise. | 2 |
Grammar | Grammar choices are confusing. Mixture of tenses. | Some grammar mistakes. Grammar choices sometimes confuse the readers. | Appropriate grammar choice. No meaning interference. | Completely appropriate grammar choice: Help readers understand meaning. | 3 |
Details | No or little details (such as explanations, examples, etc) to support & explain the topic. | Some accurate details. Do not always support topic. | Accurate info that supports the topic. | Accurate and relevant info that fully support the topic. | 3 |
Tone & audience | Unclear & inappropriate tone. Audience not considered. | Inconsistent tone. Incomplete idea of audience. | Appropriate tone. Audience is considered. | Appropriate & consistent tone. Audience correctly identified. | 3 |
Review/Critique | Not academic style. Confusing. Little evaluative language. No recommendation Summary-like. | Too much or too little info is given. No specification of parts. No quotations. Confusing opinion/ recommendation | Too much o too little info is given. Some of the parts are not specified. Some quotations. Opinion or recommendations are clearly stated. Evaluative lg. Conditionals. Inversion. | Basic info about the book provided. Structure, style, topic, etc clearly presented. Quotations included. Opinion and recommendations clearly stated. Evaluative lg. Conditionals. Inversion. | 2 |
Total | 39/64 | ||||
Valeria,
You need to work harder on academic issues. For the final exam, we will be very strict regarding these issues, so please, work on them.
Prepare a final version of this paper and upload it to your blog.
Your mark is 4 (four)
[YAC1]Not academic.
[YAC2]Use a more academic term. Besides, reading read are too close in the text and it sounds repetitive.
[YAC3]Remember you have to give appropriate format to your paragraphs.
[YAC4]You are being too Sorong. Please, use cautious language in education papers.
[YAC5]Not academic. Do not cite books but authors in the body of your paper.
[YAC6]Not appropriate format for block quotations.
[YAC7]Careful: one sentence paragraph. Keep you paragraphs balanced.
[YAC8]Check placement.
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